Wow – this is an inspiring poem, Aminat. I absolutely love the way you have painted such a vivid picture of a winter scene. I love the word “jangle” which you have used to describe your teeth jangling together.
Hi Aminat,
Great effort. Some excellent lines. My favourite is, ‘winter is a season of welcoming Christmas’.
Love the unusual word combinations in ‘jangle’ and ‘lock’ .
Maybe you don’t need both ‘leafless’ and ‘bare’ to describe the trees as they mean the same.
What you take out of a poem is just as important as what you put into it.
Keep on writing poems,
Brian Moses
Aminat,
I’m so proud of you and the success that this poem has brought you with your “Young Writers” certificate award.
I was blown away when you showed me this poem today. Some of the sounds of the words were so thoughtful and the imagery is fabulous. Make sure to take on the advice given to you, particularly by the professional poet who gave you comments!! How exciting.
I hope this is the first of many poems on your blog.
Mr Kilcoyne
Aminat,
We enjoyed your poem. We thought you used very good descriptive words about winter. It was very interesting. Now we think you should write one about spring, and maybe the weather will respond. Thanks for letting us read your work.
Great Job!
Aminat what a beautiful poem,your family and teachers must be so proud of you.I’m looking forward to reading many more of your amazing poems. Well done.g
Wow – this is an inspiring poem, Aminat. I absolutely love the way you have painted such a vivid picture of a winter scene. I love the word “jangle” which you have used to describe your teeth jangling together.
Hi Aminat,
Great effort. Some excellent lines. My favourite is, ‘winter is a season of welcoming Christmas’.
Love the unusual word combinations in ‘jangle’ and ‘lock’ .
Maybe you don’t need both ‘leafless’ and ‘bare’ to describe the trees as they mean the same.
What you take out of a poem is just as important as what you put into it.
Keep on writing poems,
Brian Moses
Aminat,
I’m so proud of you and the success that this poem has brought you with your “Young Writers” certificate award.
I was blown away when you showed me this poem today. Some of the sounds of the words were so thoughtful and the imagery is fabulous. Make sure to take on the advice given to you, particularly by the professional poet who gave you comments!! How exciting.
I hope this is the first of many poems on your blog.
Mr Kilcoyne
Good morning Mr Kilcoyne,
Thank you for your hard work and encouragement to Aminat, it motivates her to do better at school.
Regards,
Mariam
Hello Aminat,
We are very proud of you as a family. Always remember to keep the flag of Leopold flying higher in all that you do.
Mummy
To Aminat’s present and past Teachers,
Thank you All so much for making her believe in herself, her own ability to achieve greater things.
My special appreciation to Ms Kendall for giving my daughters an opportunity to be part of this great educational establishment.
Regards,
Mariam
Aminat I love your poem. It is inspirational. You are a great poet and deserve your certificate!
Well done!
Ms Lucy
Aminat,
We enjoyed your poem. We thought you used very good descriptive words about winter. It was very interesting. Now we think you should write one about spring, and maybe the weather will respond. Thanks for letting us read your work.
Great Job!
Aminat what a beautiful poem,your family and teachers must be so proud of you.I’m looking forward to reading many more of your amazing poems. Well done.g
I really like your superb poem Aminat. I loved the words you used like jangle.
Well Done!!
By your classmate Jama
Hi Aminat,
What a wonderful poem, your certificate is well deserved.
Your delightful imagery has left me smiling and reminiscing of happy winter times.
I’m looking forward to reading more of your beautiful poetry – keep up the excellent work.
Lizzie Robinson
thank you everyone for all your amazing comments it is a pleasure for me to write a poem for you
by aminat