Hi Jama,
You have used lots of different sentence openers which keep you reader entertained and have used lots of punctuation which again build the tension.
Could you use a rhetorical question or an exclamation mark in your writing?
Jama I like how the dog saved the day, and brought some joy to a scary experience. You did a nice job of writing about the emotions felt, from fear to joy. Keep up the good work writing on the 100WC.
I really like this post!
Your openers are great!
Plus your adjectives are outstanding.
Make sure next time check where the commas go.
EG:Slowly, Happily, Finally, .
Hi Jama,
You have used lots of different sentence openers which keep you reader entertained and have used lots of punctuation which again build the tension.
Could you use a rhetorical question or an exclamation mark in your writing?
Miss Rogerson
Bolton-le-Sands
England
Ok Miss Rogerson
Jama I like how the dog saved the day, and brought some joy to a scary experience. You did a nice job of writing about the emotions felt, from fear to joy. Keep up the good work writing on the 100WC.
I really like this post!
Your openers are great!
Plus your adjectives are outstanding.
Make sure next time check where the commas go.
EG:Slowly, Happily, Finally, .
Over all well done Jama.
From Dan.