Hello Devant,
Well done on entering the 100wc. You have really mixed up your long and short sentences to create tension and you punctuate them well. I’m surprised that you could think that a deafening noise was just a mouse! unless it was an enormous, super-sized mouse. I do wonder hat it really was!
Well done again
Keep entering the 100wc
Mrs W – Team 100wc
Flamborough, East Yorkshire, England
My class blog on http://kittiwakesclass2012.primaryblogger.co.uk if you would like to have a look where we are.
Hello Devant,
Well done on entering the 100wc. You have really mixed up your long and short sentences to create tension and you punctuate them well. I’m surprised that you could think that a deafening noise was just a mouse! unless it was an enormous, super-sized mouse. I do wonder hat it really was!
Well done again
Keep entering the 100wc
Mrs W – Team 100wc
Flamborough, East Yorkshire, England
My class blog on http://kittiwakesclass2012.primaryblogger.co.uk if you would like to have a look where we are.
Wow brilliant adjectives! 🙂