This is an exciting story, with a good title to get your readers interested. There are a few times when you need to work a little on your punctuation, but the story is gripping and there is some good vocabulary, well done.
Well doro…..
I love the different way you used the sentence”looking down I was surprissed to see..” from every body else. I also liked all the variety of sentence lengths and descriptive language. Well done! I also want to know if there is a part two!?
Awesome Doro.
Amazing doro is there a part two
Doro –
This is an exciting story, with a good title to get your readers interested. There are a few times when you need to work a little on your punctuation, but the story is gripping and there is some good vocabulary, well done.
-MikeB.
Well doro…..
I love the different way you used the sentence”looking down I was surprissed to see..” from every body else. I also liked all the variety of sentence lengths and descriptive language. Well done! I also want to know if there is a part two!?