What a skillful use of the 100 words and the limnitations that the select few gave you!
Just make sure that you read the story back and be careful that that all your punctuation is in the right place. Great effort for your first 100 wc!
Mr Kilcoyne
Hi Aminat
Very clever use of the words that you were given to use. I like the development of your conversation and the way you have built your sentences up.
Have another read of your work and see if you can add some punctuation, which started off very good and seemed to disappear towards the end.
When I was little, my best friend had a tortoise, I was always surprised how fast he could move. Horrace (the tortoise) is still alive now which means he is over 35 years old!
I love your story it is so funny I like how you put Michel wanted a orange turtle of cores I have wanted one aswell but I have never Sean one but I have got a teady bear of one but you sort of need new openers.Aswell as that, it is great
Thank you for entering the 100 Word Challenge, I hope you enjoyed writing it. I like the way you have started your writing with dialogue as this grabbed my attention and made me want to find out what happened next.
Well done.
Mrs Stones http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/
What a skillful use of the 100 words and the limnitations that the select few gave you!
Just make sure that you read the story back and be careful that that all your punctuation is in the right place. Great effort for your first 100 wc!
Mr Kilcoyne
Cool work me
I love your blog Aminat its very very very good By Nevaeh
Hi Aminat
Very clever use of the words that you were given to use. I like the development of your conversation and the way you have built your sentences up.
Have another read of your work and see if you can add some punctuation, which started off very good and seemed to disappear towards the end.
When I was little, my best friend had a tortoise, I was always surprised how fast he could move. Horrace (the tortoise) is still alive now which means he is over 35 years old!
I love your story it is so funny I like how you put Michel wanted a orange turtle of cores I have wanted one aswell but I have never Sean one but I have got a teady bear of one but you sort of need new openers.Aswell as that, it is great
Awesome blog Aminat
fantastic work aminat keep it up by yelena
well done aminat keep the good work up and hi everyone and yelana by charlina
Hi Aminat,
Thank you for entering the 100 Word Challenge, I hope you enjoyed writing it. I like the way you have started your writing with dialogue as this grabbed my attention and made me want to find out what happened next.
Well done.
Mrs Stones
http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/